Satire in the story is interesting to me only if it gives the characters more pressure, not just more trailer drama.
Lucia and Jason need scenes where trust, fear, bad timing, and loyalty actually matter. If the story only jumps from set piece to set piece, the characters risk becoming cool posters instead of people players argue about.
The useful checks:
- whether supporting characters feel like people or mission devices
- what the scene says about Lucia and Jason when nobody is shooting
- whether conflict comes from motives, pressure, or simple plot convenience
Русский вывод: В сюжете важны не только большие ограбления и погони. Нужны сцены, где видно характер, ошибки, доверие и давление на персонажей.
So I would put the question this way: Which group of players would care about satire in the story the most? What would confuse a new player here?
Lucia and Jason need scenes where trust, fear, bad timing, and loyalty actually matter. If the story only jumps from set piece to set piece, the characters risk becoming cool posters instead of people players argue about.
The useful checks:
- whether supporting characters feel like people or mission devices
- what the scene says about Lucia and Jason when nobody is shooting
- whether conflict comes from motives, pressure, or simple plot convenience
Русский вывод: В сюжете важны не только большие ограбления и погони. Нужны сцены, где видно характер, ошибки, доверие и давление на персонажей.
So I would put the question this way: Which group of players would care about satire in the story the most? What would confuse a new player here?