Satire in the story is interesting to me only if it gives the characters more pressure, not just more trailer drama.
Lucia and Jason need scenes where trust, fear, bad timing, and loyalty actually matter. If the story only jumps from set piece to set piece, the characters risk becoming cool posters instead of people players argue about.
The useful checks:
- whether conflict comes from motives, pressure, or simple plot convenience
- how the setting pushes characters into bad choices
- whether supporting characters feel like people or mission devices
Коротко по-русски: В сюжете важны не только большие ограбления и погони. Нужны сцены, где видно характер, ошибки, доверие и давление на персонажей.
Curious where people land on this: What would make satire in the story feel important rather than just interesting? Where do you agree or disagree? Would this help online play or just add noise?
Lucia and Jason need scenes where trust, fear, bad timing, and loyalty actually matter. If the story only jumps from set piece to set piece, the characters risk becoming cool posters instead of people players argue about.
The useful checks:
- whether conflict comes from motives, pressure, or simple plot convenience
- how the setting pushes characters into bad choices
- whether supporting characters feel like people or mission devices
Коротко по-русски: В сюжете важны не только большие ограбления и погони. Нужны сцены, где видно характер, ошибки, доверие и давление на персонажей.
Curious where people land on this: What would make satire in the story feel important rather than just interesting? Where do you agree or disagree? Would this help online play or just add noise?